Poll: Did you like the script?

I wrote a movie and I would like feed back, this is my first draft. I have some ideas what I want to change for the second draft, but I am not ready to write it until I get some feed back. Please read it here, and let me know what you think?

I have a movie-producer-friend who is willing to look at my script, so I need to do the next draft and I do need some criticism. If you are willing to help, I would appreciate it.