Will someone read this and help me, please?

i think there's a bit of repetition in there ;)

you're the nazi, you tell me: did you switch verb tenses in "upon hearing... i smiled"? i dunno. i guess if you reverse the clauses it reads correctly. nevermind :)

i think the use of "bastard", "nazi" and "i am somewhat desperate for a job" conveys a certain fun/silly/bordering on immature depending on your sense of humor. personally i'm amused and would hire you (i'm assuming that this is a entry-level / low-paying job, not something serious/drastic/9-5 making big cash kind of job)

all in all i think it works. btw people who don't reply to these sorts of posts suck.

Actually, I noticed that disagreeable verb tense there and have touched it up a bit since it was posted. I think the people who are hiring will probably enjoy the silliness of the paper. Thanks for the advice!

oh, and the repitition...I tried to edit that, but for some reason it won't happen.